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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 j4 Q0 }, ^% r- W, V& W+ L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / c( X7 j/ Y/ Z4 C* o) a1 ?5 x
}% W P; _, l' k$ zLet me just rewrite yours:
, v/ P& Z7 p2 i2 _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 B4 ?5 j' k$ z( v3 L5 U7 C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 l# F( w$ V/ K: w/ e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 Q2 x6 I% X# x3 n5 Q
* C; z/ y9 O8 xThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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