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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; G$ |9 ?( A+ ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 p* V8 Y' l% O- K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. o# P& j0 U, j) l& o/ D1 c. M; R7 s" J" A
Let me just rewrite yours:
! `" |7 j2 r. a, }3 _6 n9 TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) j( _- i0 d. q. C' J, E J2 y
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 H4 J8 E+ D9 h: A3 [! P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) G" \0 ^7 y7 \4 V# S) T
% b8 w6 z4 k: b7 l `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; j! `7 G7 y, s
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