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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 v" G' N4 A" z5 F. f/ I' ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 e9 ~1 j( I' g/ c- r: [' ~9 C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , o6 G& I' u# G2 ?6 _ _0 n6 A
e4 ` w2 R ?Let me just rewrite yours:
, @: c* ]" W3 B& R v0 a. }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 N) J: M+ z7 G0 E9 t+ y; k/ Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; L3 Z' i/ U7 \" [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ s7 B1 Y4 X! v! i$ ~* v2 P. g
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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