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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: D {8 ^5 I& [" J- g) B/ O; Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 @( A/ Y, T9 E- J j9 C) Ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 t v# R, F- x% g8 u' ^1 h$ V# `7 Z+ G' _
Let me just rewrite yours:; e. \6 p. T$ ?* y1 e
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" N" Y6 X! t! w* l/ {* K) v+ d/ Q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 r0 J! b: U& H# h; s4 u8 G- L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 X' }* t$ E5 r- n2 w
0 g; @/ |% N% p& I, M/ u/ UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: f u6 C6 ^" e; gThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 ~ J# _/ p e. ? D
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