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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 r$ z7 J5 u1 j2 g
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 P3 |4 Y# T7 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , m- }: \; F5 P4 [* U/ c2 f, o
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Let me just rewrite yours:
& C7 ^2 v' \; {: [& Y" w5 cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* w2 @1 y- w. K' K {$ |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' `+ d& k) F* r: I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' [2 {* \2 O9 R3 {6 |& J; @! y9 r! HThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 X2 P9 ~! U5 ~
) C. V* V6 L) r; v( ]9 K; HThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 H2 _; W9 @7 H3 ~% r2 U
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