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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& x s5 ~/ w8 \
" c* u( M; L- H6 ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , y& v: [3 o, {5 o1 N: E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - u6 v% G& I; f: c, Y) v& k: }
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Let me just rewrite yours:% C+ J5 p( R6 E; ~- ^) h
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 c( L* q5 f% T8 f5 E: o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* r/ X2 y9 q( E" n5 K1 cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ t# n: R% S5 o
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: Y" Q+ L0 x/ S
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