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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) D$ c; \0 y0 L: U/ J- c1 t* ~" H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % l* n" D9 u! w* R, l
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Let me just rewrite yours:6 E! Z& u# G6 E3 w. |+ o% w$ Y
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) L; z8 ^( a$ V1 U* s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, ?; m$ a9 D J# G& c$ [/ M) t5 P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! b" b/ n+ Y( {3 d# ?
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ x! p3 Q' X8 LThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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