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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 S0 \+ R8 b4 f' keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 Y8 C! p( N. A8 a3 L, c
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( B2 \. n! V4 f& a4 B5 Y, Q1 nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: q, ^1 Z! u& W5 B0 W+ N% z7 w
1 y9 c/ E4 H& l$ Z7 X8 _2 n; U4 U4 [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
Q8 b$ i7 J, {# t. j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ y4 g8 S5 {1 L% q( v; L2 b
/ O6 }( M# D. B! E' ~& o9 j4 CThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 ?, s$ w, q/ ^; h2 ?9 }
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