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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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$ P& m \; a+ _4 H; kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - ? e# i3 d9 F, K( @2 k( J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 ?2 O1 a; v7 M, b5 |" |) K& w/ x% B1 j- v9 G+ q+ m# h/ J
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 O. U7 [& x! C* Y* d4 A* QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 x3 J$ z% H! M4 O5 h# c2 a
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( U( x5 P6 H9 L* E T+ |* J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 \, S1 j$ t, ?6 K4 f% }$ o _
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