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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: ]( f: A8 B( G. P1 deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & o, P8 Z; {8 o& @& z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
9 o! Q8 n2 ^" v! [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 D! u, x0 t, c4 X3 s6 i9 t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 i7 \* c/ D' }* ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." n! G* p! }2 ?0 S( w( J# Y+ n
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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