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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! e- }0 |. H" I9 ^0 c( C$ W
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 F c, H* [3 g2 t6 |0 d( O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 K9 y$ [. D+ I9 R, r% ^5 j+ j$ H S0 p* o0 v; M) q. M6 j2 Q
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 L9 @% j' v, Z0 ?; H; e/ x( jIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 g! b: \. X9 n
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 M% O5 M9 ]( _/ v7 l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." j, }5 S. K/ f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 R7 P4 }; ~! R8 H: h" [2 n, @
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