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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! ]0 ^# {/ e0 j$ o' ~3 ]4 U6 Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" v' ]' c# A' i) P6 a2 J0 eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . U- W6 h/ k+ K# f$ y- z3 Q) x$ Q# J, E. W: a
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 Z# q b9 w7 yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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F9 j* o2 L- E$ H0 S% r9 ~1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 R; u" H7 g- T( {2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- x( A- x" V: \* H C, y
T* m, p, N" u- p& ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." `$ p3 i( l' @) I
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* Z" P/ m8 M+ f. z* X! U5 I! Q
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