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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 z$ Y* P% k# V$ y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) G' k7 W* [6 ?/ H$ Z) Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 C* F' P5 l& l: d6 D
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Let me just rewrite yours:- y* R0 p- i0 ~/ o7 p0 @! {7 r' H
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 }2 h, T6 ^3 ~% J6 v. _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ o$ n7 ^6 e& u; _% l1 b5 H: }# A; u
, N; E: [4 ?8 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* L. V4 j5 _2 |: l _9 S; _5 GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ a( K6 D& R$ B4 e1 p4 {, ?, m: |
, w N! W' Z1 M6 AGretz. |
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