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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 Z( k# j! u8 e F; Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# s$ @% v8 ^! C, W2 E* |3 ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! i% \/ h' O+ O0 d1 p% y7 o
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Let me just rewrite yours:4 {; U9 Z; l$ ]6 @& y$ M/ Q& x
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 I( \7 V! D+ A: [0 l& z' f
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: Q- e. b( I9 t) [2 q# V4 X0 Q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) `* W, _) }1 E- ^$ o8 G
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) v& n* g- j3 F6 P% v% L, ]" e
& W5 d7 _& X8 D! w Z) UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% _# F9 k) d/ _4 g( I& t* x
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