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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 A1 v% I( n- V3 y0 m( f3 lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 [9 u @/ W% T: v4 aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 P1 Y8 t) f6 E( ?7 R3 C: I
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Let me just rewrite yours:7 s r& D, ?% F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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- i2 A( g6 w, d( p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ R, X& D, I' N2 Q( M2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. W9 g$ [6 T E. `8 R
( P6 m; o# t/ p7 X! |; z! YThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ f# p% A6 I* T
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* P" _( C4 d' U2 _0 ]
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