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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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1 j& a9 M* `5 J6 ?it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' Z' S3 v7 n, W1 |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 `$ U9 q3 b, @& b+ g& Q
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Let me just rewrite yours:& X8 k6 u% m8 b! e. E( j+ T
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 A0 P3 g8 o; r3 l. D" X
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 N0 ]% }% F4 u' R
/ f5 U, b4 |8 E# G) @& ?) s7 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 B( e; Z" Y3 l# l$ W' K
$ ?; L; D/ w' D, @$ d. MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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