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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: ?5 r F- @9 i
3 }# S5 s7 @% yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' ^6 N7 x: @) c6 k7 ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 K2 o* I2 H9 g+ R; u1 c2 q6 ^
: V5 E! p$ ~+ p( V; X& B+ Z9 ALet me just rewrite yours:
& c) i. x( G1 ~; v0 X( c0 m8 \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* \, I; @: c1 t" X# m, S( v; x: s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% H5 }' T# }1 Q! V: f; k' f6 x) k* ^
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% P, O& D! p; [2 I- t1 t
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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