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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 i9 U: L R; K0 }5 a; R. Sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 C& _2 h" H9 r, Q0 {2 F. ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; ?8 d4 p5 V& b( z: w9 |+ F) h- ?7 m+ C3 P4 E* |4 }; y
Let me just rewrite yours:- u5 ~8 V3 Q% B" ?" g9 { i
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. y) u, @# S# c0 }
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 F L2 O& @* c' U, n9 n7 d) q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% H' H4 m0 r' d) |3 r& O0 l$ m Y1 B
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% l% }+ C* B' j( C
/ t. x9 w" W, u9 V3 aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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