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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 M* t$ Q3 c) ?
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 `1 t% g+ L) i9 ]: X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 Q" _& w9 \# G; p
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ U( k; j8 R) U. |/ v( j9 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ m5 h) @& x" k- |, k7 U3 W2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ q2 C5 T8 P; g$ \6 {0 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. F0 Z: @ }/ L
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- x8 G7 w0 g: d* O4 W1 N
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