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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " f7 l! m: ?. W* v$ O% r5 n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . K4 i& I7 ~1 N3 x& }5 g& g$ G6 u" r- W5 c" t- e' B% j9 e
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ X& A' u5 z& x7 o4 F, e) e# c; WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ m6 c& _+ b P& X+ z2 e1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. i7 ?* B" G$ S3 ?, o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 q) a3 |* L0 [; |: P! n
1 m$ p" v! E$ s! _: PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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