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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, ~, r {& G2 N- n Q
" {! c, i* r$ |5 ?0 Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 y3 j1 A/ Q7 |0 ]1 \; Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 w3 a; J# u# D: n* k
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Let me just rewrite yours:* ^) q4 k( l' h U
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) q& R: `8 \+ ]/ ~, j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' A, H4 ~; m X; a( U; O8 N$ r; t
! z1 V6 w3 j$ w4 C, a' {" hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 I$ m6 e9 z8 o. VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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