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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 V/ f* ?6 h! P7 r% n/ dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 e5 [, ]6 k/ z5 a5 }$ `% _, e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 Z. C. s" e G6 c3 B" P7 _8 G3 G
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Let me just rewrite yours:# ~4 y3 j$ v0 D3 \2 M9 u) h
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% H- b1 d1 z0 N* {* C; L
O. }8 P0 ~; A. ^5 o# y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# [6 d. S, T' a' b7 P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. F2 P! [1 w( d7 h. P `. d5 G1 ~! G
1 j- O ~8 ~2 K+ cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ k% O t0 e6 G
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 V. N: N. }/ c Y0 ^, N
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