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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ r8 F0 ]6 {$ g, j- l/ N# Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 I! _7 [0 h: h$ g& L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! |, N5 c7 w: A' W8 a' U% j3 b5 w
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 H' G# i7 j" t! H3 I8 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 c8 u2 n5 Y' p* O
- }* A' W! ^1 `1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) u" B4 T" K! @$ ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., U+ H1 g2 j. v# [: F8 ?$ Q
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( d& O; s3 B. `. K0 U* g
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