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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; B, W+ z" g5 q/ G1 Y' y( Neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * n ^& j7 t" e! I; O5 s- s! S
4 g8 g' v3 N8 q: M' h5 MLet me just rewrite yours:
% D: r8 {! d7 R3 e# [' Q9 EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. l6 i% H' c+ |" s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ Q4 P$ x( G" i% C. i, {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 X% _4 o" p; {6 {# _8 H( @
/ @. e6 j, L' N3 AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* W8 d' N* G" G3 [0 M. W) U' _$ X: F5 wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% s$ {+ q3 O6 }! f: \
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