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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ T9 g& ~3 l' u) `' ~: c: ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . C! Y* ]& P, Z: R, g
. j8 ~( o5 w8 X! |( h$ kLet me just rewrite yours:
, @( f$ m2 X/ i$ L; {8 h. c v! TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ Q6 L& z( |: s2 @2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 \, j9 d( L6 @; u. IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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