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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* `& T; C. K- E$ i+ p' Q7 x
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : ]$ ]1 s0 Z7 s& `2 {7 @3 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 Z* }- d9 W. `* M* L0 l8 k
) A+ U Z4 H g, ^3 ]Let me just rewrite yours:
5 E2 n8 A% p0 H, A1 g9 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 M3 g& c0 u8 {1 E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( E# L8 X# S+ o7 U6 F7 a2 `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- Q/ J: ]4 l% C0 B4 U, k* J6 b& o* N4 s
8 B4 J( j; ~* D' \" v' SThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." K- H k \5 N: Y
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