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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # l* v% j6 b% `2 a$ j
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . S1 W, J0 S+ `2 x0 u, b" F7 R, |9 u% F0 l! X
Let me just rewrite yours:
; X+ h0 b9 H' D0 J7 `It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 N/ n0 A# N, V
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 C: w4 D! n9 ~1 A# g3 K- U2 C! b7 u
9 o' v; h+ I6 v( U$ ?$ g, ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ ]# o8 L5 o- i7 tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., o& h! R7 z5 w
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