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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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. t. O5 @3 |* zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* I( P: r; V3 N- M' |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : @$ Y3 O x( s8 |: B0 F& h, W0 Z# i6 d. i$ G+ S0 @& U
Let me just rewrite yours:# l- s- G0 h/ l% K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! p, K; N& y' m. A
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& x$ F! D3 \/ o7 c: w( f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% S4 a) n, i5 b8 k( l# d$ G+ w. M! m9 d
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