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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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1 r; y: v" ?0 K9 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 {2 N, h; M/ Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ m4 V3 k4 A7 ^; A8 k# K/ M# s" i) K
Let me just rewrite yours:
( a: @- c6 x, d0 HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 g' v& [& g. \ G- w! j# ]4 V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) U# Q/ ~2 O v4 f, F; XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ ^4 ?* u9 g# `2 M2 n0 }+ XThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' B$ L" G6 y- p8 @+ n. \) Z
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