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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& S+ _, |6 G8 Q) Kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 d3 G. n% e7 H5 e. n' p) T, ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; I; U" E6 g5 F0 o" _$ U
& h8 \$ D- ?! n/ y# e0 ] z! GLet me just rewrite yours:
2 b1 ~% R& {& l3 U2 aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, n9 b! S/ o4 p% a5 R
- A) b) h I+ }8 M+ c+ f1 M1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 A- t5 W$ Y- z+ |3 r3 R2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ l$ s1 o! S) s5 l/ [; I
( B. \# ^# c$ u# E4 y) aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- b9 r: i" k6 {, P( ~
U! m9 D' v* N* q; T3 ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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