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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ Y% I3 S' A- J$ ?+ J' \" ^$ [
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ w7 a2 `) X7 C, Q& c6 Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / p6 {4 V$ I3 S
$ a. z# U4 O0 I+ O, n$ _1 vLet me just rewrite yours:
~8 @0 A. A5 B% _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) v k" P. P, Q+ d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# T- e1 ]4 z) w: Y* A5 PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. \4 o& A6 M9 V: a* A- i6 n
2 q3 e1 `% s8 d2 D0 yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 _) K/ Y7 G' v+ e6 `" E
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