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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% a$ C1 n) f b k0 D5 g2 \# f+ N
1 J/ [( n7 Z. Y: A6 cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# A% n+ u5 d0 l& }1 d7 Z" beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , b5 }, \ b; F, g8 K5 O. U0 S
( Z7 I# s& x* g7 sLet me just rewrite yours:
) k4 ^) u/ | C- FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# _6 Z, J1 j# }, J2 A& j3 O1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* ?6 U0 Y4 O3 F- ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" V- } v- p0 U% |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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5 F$ {: r+ R+ a, mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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