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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: S! C4 s+ [. H4 ^/ S g( Q5 ^: y
- x7 W5 X/ S+ w$ [5 R% y5 c% Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) b3 B0 z! R, `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 h0 ?, ]5 J# R. B- E
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Let me just rewrite yours:) a: `! D8 z5 U( J% m
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 ~8 ]: u Z2 }+ N4 n7 s3 O3 _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 U& i" U( m) U
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