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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: D! W6 ~4 Q% K U' N* ]6 ?it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 K, H& l$ d& y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + }8 s; R9 r2 _: c
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' N" h, u' |: Q" k* VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ A5 P3 m; F: M3 ?' \$ a9 M4 U
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! l, ?. }. M, J' L9 i( c! k0 J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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