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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 o# \% m' E/ e
4 }% x, B" o" m7 W' Y3 |it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( a" C( }# z0 V- t% T w" }$ N
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . Z0 T% m( N: h- t) C
9 X V K* i, r, |4 q; mLet me just rewrite yours:
* J. Z5 n' d4 F8 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) p. p, v# F7 i! [/ Z' j C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- k" A1 Q/ E1 Y' L# i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., e/ N1 I! ~9 Y; t5 ^0 W. \) x/ Y( @6 `
- {/ B* B" n2 {. K+ iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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