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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# N5 S, d, m& c B5 z
" P V$ z' E3 f g4 B% wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' X# @9 I3 A$ R* M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " K1 Y: _% Z8 L
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) S5 i& O$ b$ v& O( c8 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. C4 p9 {$ a1 d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 Z7 s1 Y1 g7 u, i7 F0 g' m8 j \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 Y5 a5 r3 A6 \# y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* D p3 U( t @; w* k, r$ K0 e5 U
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