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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 d+ [ x6 r# F/ u2 b" q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . g) e6 A' I1 U6 G" m
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Let me just rewrite yours:% u. h# v5 q0 h
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! s" \' n; J$ S3 o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 v/ ]0 |% Y: ^5 [! k, E& ?/ ]
. p2 T7 _% @# Y/ f5 SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 ^! {3 O; W- M9 S: l. e" EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 H! u n0 Z" w8 F
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