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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, m6 h& h7 F) C9 C8 ]5 Q- W
) d% D3 E4 N6 y" U1 t' Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ^0 R S' T! a8 x4 r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 N9 N3 D) P/ E, t m( r, \
0 O; a7 a( _9 n& O! i2 j3 OLet me just rewrite yours:
% h+ }9 H3 Y5 \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 t9 m$ ^( M/ S0 k: d0 J5 ]* B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ c6 b+ M3 T A0 ]6 O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 x$ P$ S$ d+ ~+ K9 n6 ~
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 [1 W2 {) t5 M) r7 W+ [
1 k9 N2 L$ B$ S- @# f. r* aGretz. |
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