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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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) Y2 a) m. t# r5 r lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 Z- _# j5 ~) t6 i% V
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " @, g% w+ B1 t: |! l
) J3 X, D( h9 e gLet me just rewrite yours:
4 y2 H) F& R, G4 rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 e9 w4 L- U9 @2 w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." W H, \/ S$ g4 x7 a- _' ~9 l0 ^
" {# I6 S f2 @" B+ M2 QThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: L# q( |- Y/ K& ~7 b* u2 e1 O& [
6 D, Z3 v) \ b% sGretz. |
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