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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 T' ^8 ^) }& d: l/ s2 _! A2 G( Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 {# l6 \# \$ F1 f$ }4 K" t" Aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + V5 b, }: f. f8 f! E* [ I6 w% b) C2 ~
Let me just rewrite yours:, \- F* @# J- ?
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, D; T z( z8 ^; ?. M. m" z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- `: F3 _6 ^8 Y0 g0 X/ z
* [7 }7 k% o! j9 r5 U2 R. q4 F3 L9 uThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! X- S+ R# t9 k
% h" |$ g! u" p) N$ _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( R/ N) V8 c8 ?' j$ }0 D5 j
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