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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 Y$ {! z3 Q" s1 \7 Y7 m6 T
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! {, L$ Z: X+ `! o% J% G5 Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - ^0 ~ h5 b5 Q, ~# l7 }
- S6 K" P4 Q3 ^$ Z bLet me just rewrite yours:
2 [4 [; y, G! Z/ v+ O9 MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: `5 K6 T' F( ?! T
6 v+ j( P% K3 w9 a! P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 n s" ^* k1 s2 }$ q7 F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% A f4 S' ^9 F* d/ G3 j r; X6 @ Q
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 O$ \0 d5 \0 X+ O* h2 _3 m, D3 a
9 a; N. Z6 U$ J) s; `2 g( P, x% PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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