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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & t! U, H3 V A, c
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * B- S& ]7 w' w* A$ f- J' X3 Z+ j) B4 B2 A1 f' v
Let me just rewrite yours:
9 S( \9 F; G+ N6 B" xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! N, c/ r, o* G8 O7 _
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; a$ p2 Z2 p; n4 ~6 O' T. N
t( Y( l$ ^. J2 S* w" n, U. T9 E* kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, q9 I& R( a: m( UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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