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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: T+ h. \* i. z& _6 }) \
4 m7 O$ ]+ Z7 m( x# w8 i& ~; O+ Kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 c9 t! U. m J' w2 k$ r7 xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - O. R7 \) r k0 ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* c' N% ?2 u% A8 x; f* D2 P8 S/ v! X. CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 F1 m0 }4 t3 a7 W% F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% v' N* F9 e0 S2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; ]: r \4 U1 A/ }+ v! D, tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- U3 C" Q5 r. _9 z4 j
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