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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 y, H r7 l" P, L" z" R
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , L5 l; F+ g+ P0 S. C Y# w" \$ x% Q2 S, _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 Y3 p- h: {9 z1 \5 `5 }* l
6 T- V7 Z4 L' Q8 SLet me just rewrite yours:! Z( q5 C0 R3 `4 X# v( r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 [+ g' w# @7 U. {% B9 w2 W; g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: A1 P2 A0 p. ?: j* X1 s
4 b+ p# h, X+ h% Y6 M8 h" {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) J3 X6 D6 V. \+ H& j
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( _+ K. d8 Y( l9 F% d3 l
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