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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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7 d( e+ d. q% D; |- |it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 f, E5 O8 y2 S
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 b8 n" h3 L& O s
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! r/ [! Z# N B# t0 e X/ ^; n' ?It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* x1 W) y l* L# L, c4 `$ d; ^
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 y0 i( ]6 f* ]5 I/ ~) ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 F! @+ Y& ~6 K* J
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