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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" v# }7 _& l4 }7 w9 Nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: K3 j1 b5 ?) x7 w, \- reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & O. X& ]4 r, A$ z0 |
" _8 C; ~* z3 f6 q5 Z; zLet me just rewrite yours:
! P+ s( p/ U% L& B- UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 H9 N" D) e# J& o4 j1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( f, |/ N+ Z8 j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ \ y O3 A" T' }. o3 e" ]7 EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ x3 G" k) d( i8 w/ D) ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- P7 {2 y9 K, V, U: H. E7 T
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