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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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+ W% u# A5 z7 b8 Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! W" N( L8 R7 |2 \1 R5 o. e. T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & Q' v; O9 {6 b
) |8 P, F& R( |Let me just rewrite yours:
" J7 p6 P" X7 z$ `2 kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 ?$ d5 n# y/ _. p2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' Z9 x4 ~; Z9 b! r3 G" v" mThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 A, F3 [: k, eThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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