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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 H2 U8 _( e4 V) t9 o8 V! M
2 h2 V" D! p8 Z; z2 {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' F( B0 A% {- y9 I: m& y, v2 K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. Q/ t* v& ~$ u- p% ^6 D9 y) I
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Let me just rewrite yours:7 ^% t- @) Q3 Z. f, q4 W8 |' S
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: [/ S' K1 K- S' }5 w
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( v; a$ {) ]* g+ b
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 y1 V( W" f4 O" |2 a5 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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