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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 Q" l- a. K$ D- B9 z4 I7 ?. oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % Y: z( Z% J b, E* V$ x& \6 S- j x
Let me just rewrite yours:7 t0 b8 N3 s8 y4 X
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 t+ q) k3 G+ m# t) m
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: M) b3 b" M: I; b
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& c1 y6 d2 z- R8 M' `) W, Y9 e
1 h# k: g- o! L" a# A" F" v3 sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( i8 g% b8 v0 I r9 s8 Z2 D! K
, I8 B# r% E) E1 v+ hThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' K {+ X+ Y! j1 b7 N
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