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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 G0 Z# G$ @: K/ |. t3 O$ M% w! i
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / z- L# ?3 o; j# t$ j
! C) \* I8 C% U6 m/ gLet me just rewrite yours:
- S( q2 M7 T+ `1 O E/ O; t: T% FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: z6 r, k) ^ m1 ^1 |/ `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; f7 @ ^1 O& K K3 ]$ D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 d/ H# c4 s! H" j9 xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 G* {1 [% V( C7 q& g
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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