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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 w1 o9 r$ V9 B, p* i
0 p6 v8 k1 r* W/ wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 E( ^( l& g8 {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ g$ o6 }: @- E; n+ l7 }* G$ A
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( L7 s2 k+ Z1 e u$ LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, _& i2 T) [5 Z5 \1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( M% M7 t; P" U# I7 g1 g/ o0 P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 w F2 w& `$ O$ h) \( C0 O% I
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ e8 ^/ I6 y/ z, }1 d
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