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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 m! e+ P0 _1 Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- y3 v1 ]0 J. C: C3 L: @$ [9 severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 |9 _8 [. E1 g. N5 l9 C1 o
7 a( u( O; D: ~7 e5 SLet me just rewrite yours:
0 f, ^9 \1 ^$ z3 ^6 R+ u8 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 U, r( Q$ p4 J0 X* R; C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ B: N" z1 K2 R) Z* d
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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