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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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`: F n& E1 Nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + K, }, G h& P& m, J+ i: B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . h4 I# i5 A6 J4 E" c% \
; \: B+ _$ G- z" P+ DLet me just rewrite yours:
1 n% V/ b$ n9 Q5 E' ~& Y: k2 s' @. SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" H3 Q) t, W+ h5 j0 k# Z; j
5 u) I! J j9 F( m) s P# e* [+ P [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& T7 H+ d. _! ?& [5 `$ ?" x. P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ S* R9 }# v: `
6 j- P. `& C/ N$ @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: G' S }# A# ~6 Y7 r @; @8 _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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