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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; c. k& I/ Z$ q6 k2 e- g! S* oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( m) `, B: |1 m1 s+ p5 N/ C7 d1 e9 Y. m/ B7 V/ \
Let me just rewrite yours:9 f7 Y: k' C7 C" j) H) K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 P- ], B9 D4 d; C3 m2 g8 I9 o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 r( i! z; h* P, R& I8 A5 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 j" s5 U' {* G( v
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' R* K0 F4 H: n1 k; U- ^
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