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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; c) b( ?6 J; V3 Y! X4 ]; Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : W, v' g' ]1 l
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 ]$ _8 U. ~' ], e @( Q3 e# rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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$ F z) n& @# J7 |5 Y" d1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# b# b7 q2 y$ U; ^& ~6 g" [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 ~" T% c. @) _
( H, A- r v' y% Z w' I4 C1 }There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% p' U3 _! h4 p5 Z0 |% k
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- e3 M( X6 ]: }
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