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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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+ Q, V5 k% J6 _) R* q! Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 h6 k3 A- H: R$ Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % ~0 Y4 ]& J0 y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' ?3 {' {, c5 Y6 QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. R8 c5 Y! d0 l0 W% r; d0 {, ^
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., }: E) `8 X8 z, K
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 i1 k% Z% m& J' ]8 L& ~* J
. n+ Q2 d" d0 d& z# aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ J1 Y+ {0 k5 ]$ J) z( o6 |4 P
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