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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 k* M; g8 j: r; ?! N
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ _: X4 C' ?& T. b8 @$ T% }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. Y0 k4 @' A6 z' W
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 v8 T' f% p$ U# e9 k4 L- CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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