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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - p9 l/ n, l. V6 {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 q p1 p) I% L: l" K
7 l- ~, L- X2 CLet me just rewrite yours:
& t: e! T* {+ w0 s, x8 }5 `) B3 hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 g; U2 U( Q5 v) O, e
+ Z8 |5 K* y' ~! C. N0 ]8 F8 l# ^1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* Q1 U. K. e+ f P! @$ s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ B3 F/ e+ ^# q- f$ ~9 ]
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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