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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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h# l1 K# ~6 Z N- Kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 G6 n2 w$ Q8 ~4 P0 P* m' @' Veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 y& k3 [* H0 D5 R, J2 F3 T
: T3 v! E2 q( x8 s$ ]7 |, ~Let me just rewrite yours:3 b$ N+ Q% L& l" u# s
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 U$ \/ A! I# c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ o( e/ \( V1 y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 C6 B2 x( I$ Q2 K- R5 J5 j! l
) Y5 a) w* B; o, jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ d) E7 P" |; ]
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