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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 s B4 W/ S( b# i( H; p+ t
* O4 p1 N( ~2 f; z$ E- ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 H: U& K" W+ [- P+ t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + Y/ w- R* A4 O; }- \8 j: w; ^
7 B' \3 r1 S/ @( R4 d; I, YLet me just rewrite yours:
. c p, i, }- @% @% pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, O0 c4 U7 y. E& {7 u/ j
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 \: G; e$ \/ J2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 {9 R5 A3 Z$ ?* J. ^- c
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