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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' S0 \, E* N) w" x# d4 A2 O% u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # _8 g2 a3 p/ S' Q; I% N, q/ J: a1 P* k6 c* j8 w, U
Let me just rewrite yours:! m8 v4 A1 h& g) J" {+ ^5 f
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, M* Y* f2 ^9 a! T( O7 p3 F
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- v4 {* y% p: ]- X! c2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 Y# s2 B* D9 Q+ C/ \2 aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& d. Q- j; D" x @, v# {" S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% ~0 B# Q" q3 Q) J
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