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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 u" Z. v. r1 U: h' T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 D! ]' N5 W0 H- {* j- i, a
6 C3 i/ i% r1 _2 E4 z' r8 LLet me just rewrite yours:1 p9 {$ c8 m( P" U4 k2 l- v2 O
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# A5 R U4 f6 [5 j9 f: ^
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; E6 S. K$ E1 bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. r5 W: @5 D+ @% i0 D
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