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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( N6 ]2 ~* q( D' I# x4 j
+ P8 X& j0 J% Y( lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, }# \: \: X+ L! P: [ }7 Aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , _ M/ `' i( h) q. j
5 P0 Y3 d2 |2 J; z3 @- z, c$ qLet me just rewrite yours:) m" c9 A9 X N6 z( I) L- X
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" i, G: l$ ?4 {8 h6 i3 z. K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 E, ` L# l0 ]8 x- e( _( }. m
. j' g3 f' b+ r% m% FThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 @% l* K) z$ C1 x, D9 Y
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