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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: X' o) k* G. x* } j( qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me.
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Let me just rewrite yours:# O+ l/ \) m) j4 C6 R
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; e w, U% p7 X+ u7 Y. ]
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- Y5 a' M$ I' R/ G; ~8 |* C& l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) l$ z0 |$ |3 I( r# |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; H6 j8 J9 P- R4 b$ ], _; C% v
, G- \) C0 b. ^* K- n8 |4 iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., x5 N2 s2 F& w0 `) G
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