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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: ]- \1 `; P' c9 H Q
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( u/ |& a$ l. Z2 W$ v9 _+ s) B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 C$ W- P( |' I, D# q1 V
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Let me just rewrite yours:# }& j1 K5 s# | l# \7 p
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: Q/ L" b- ?( V- \
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* p! @ U/ t, j! h7 B1 S* h- Q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 Y( x1 y; A) o# R0 k8 hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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