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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 B( C( k Y$ Q, T* m+ S3 S8 D7 h7 Nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! P9 r# m6 U# \) _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 N5 T) T6 f2 J5 ?' ~1 u0 G- M7 }
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Let me just rewrite yours:
& t, L! T1 v! d8 p9 N! RIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' n$ E4 A' g4 j
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) l% [& n$ _' k4 [! E G3 T% a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: A' b& e( l- c! F6 e8 U+ G6 e& B3 R
9 N$ X$ ]* M' i0 v9 EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# [, P" R, B f
+ b' C" ^8 @! h4 p3 D: nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ n) K) h8 m s, Q! R
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