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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 A5 ^- c& S) v# \it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ @5 E, v) c* u$ x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) [7 F ?6 L9 V8 @, B9 f8 P* |1 T& K5 v) A: S6 _
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 }" `7 l: w1 h5 `+ O, GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# n% v, @' _* c$ m4 A4 p% u/ @0 F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 y; T V, O) ]& {, G& @
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) {( `4 G9 B- ~/ c
/ a6 ~% C! s X- m$ zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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