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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: @7 z2 v$ ~) _. l4 Lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* w9 }/ \& m# |, C$ oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / [; B; q, u+ f. @/ p, t0 y
' e$ G6 K* t8 [/ F! T" j+ s5 _Let me just rewrite yours:
# s w3 ?0 S) M; ]$ m* {, }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: z1 W; Y& x* g+ `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., V( Z$ R& r6 u+ G/ l
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( |" z3 }$ |: P" p! p5 q1 R
: l6 k: w: w" z2 p# q3 x: _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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