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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ N+ J6 T# L( ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 P @( C. \$ X/ P+ \! v' n4 T
5 b5 S2 `$ ]- @6 \. ^* I& QLet me just rewrite yours:- J3 h/ \$ c7 f" |
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" o& S- z3 d! d; M
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; @. t4 i7 m" Y4 D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 Q1 B/ P# E5 T% K/ g+ i7 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: V% K( h1 j1 J+ d z0 l1 C4 [
# G7 Y" K0 j; R' lThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 }2 Y. I. E" F2 G. R* \3 {
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