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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 o% Q* C5 x: t" h
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 n4 C+ N9 ]0 ?
' `7 G- m, ?7 M9 fLet me just rewrite yours:
; \1 J( W) v8 X" ?9 b. M1 j2 yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ p |, H" L! r2 h3 ]) K
$ ~4 E$ C) ^5 |$ O- Q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 L6 P9 j) n5 U- u# y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ w8 g" a# A6 n: Q+ W8 |% dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- Q8 m i& R& M5 t: [
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