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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% [* t0 Z# ?3 `% R! P
" x2 P& y" Z3 h5 `1 r# `$ T1 j' Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: Q) g# V6 }' {, s' X! \* v/ geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; D! T: h2 J7 X! F, W% F. Y* G! u" T& E0 s
Let me just rewrite yours:
& G. B9 y+ i- j1 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 s8 n% [6 }0 u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- q& F; o9 z+ u/ RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% \& [* K+ q8 [# ?! B
& j5 s+ f \0 s+ Y6 IThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 ~5 E7 \4 W9 E1 x9 i+ B1 X: G
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