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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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, g/ m% P9 N5 u8 e3 @it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ x/ b% N7 u1 ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 o# y2 ^" O4 r z! p" q+ {3 O) o: c4 W
Let me just rewrite yours:% `" P! U" q% I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 o5 @3 g! ]" v. \! _
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 j. ^; q* A$ y4 B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" R# Q$ [- i, TThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 h& M9 e5 W$ Q, p+ L1 Z
8 m3 \& K P! ?# T& zGretz. |
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