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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ d: Y- I" z; D, l( Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 b# b) T2 u1 v( D0 X% ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ D9 I. D1 ~: H6 ^+ R k0 U' v6 f- {; |2 a* ^' N# p: `% l6 K1 c' `
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 n6 U9 d% H" c; a, N& @; D; xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( y& v' D9 x$ Y# g9 a; b D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ }1 ]& V: g1 z- D
! P) t) o! T& N3 [: z6 DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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