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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; R' j) H* ?; l! s0 D0 B& Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
V/ S! c7 p& @8 v+ z4 l D) x" zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * G2 y n* ~! p) K
& i& x4 B2 ~2 L V, ALet me just rewrite yours:
. R* a1 J' n! d/ f# LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 E- O+ `% h) w6 ?6 p- Q& l4 e9 |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 |4 V' {" f3 |: c* e4 I' ^# u2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ T- V( Y- q4 Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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