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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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, ~! ?& A# t: {7 n3 u8 {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 o% p6 ^9 A- Q, V; q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 G1 A& B( u) S; n) U
' D; j' I+ Y" Y4 e+ u2 m4 E$ {Let me just rewrite yours:
' |& B# @9 c. h0 S* ]3 R9 b/ M! W) VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* Y6 F6 i# d$ h8 N7 G
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! n5 c' T. H# J2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 c) Q1 v. H' s) F: A7 w
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 e& h$ W; @5 E7 h8 j! m' WThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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