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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ c9 K- n$ l' m* i; `* I
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % c, I8 N! g8 c4 Q8 j, E {) j
}( J9 F1 }! D# C: A; f5 ELet me just rewrite yours:
1 L5 a+ R$ T% e' a: p0 ]& @! zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% S, V# T0 ^! Q4 I( {+ W
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' j d) ^: D/ o$ m6 K: UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ ~% `5 h R) q* o9 P( [9 i
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 |6 z8 e6 G3 n! K
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