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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( |; C( @3 x4 j8 m9 v, Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& k" a9 ~8 _; R m/ I' ?2 p1 ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! e9 d, k6 D' t- \! W r/ W6 c
5 Y. z8 M7 R; n8 F5 ALet me just rewrite yours:
5 s$ f5 h1 K% R3 b MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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V5 c" w2 U$ R- h/ n1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 l/ s0 E s1 i! L! U3 t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 _3 i# r# _3 |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& I( v7 R" z4 i# u
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