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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& J5 }% V' [3 O$ `7 ~( o8 Y5 Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! F9 F6 y5 ]8 W2 f$ F7 T& y6 H
8 h6 c6 R7 a4 @2 a0 |! NLet me just rewrite yours:
* K6 x4 s( G) VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" n0 [+ }, ^; K6 g1 S3 c3 ~1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ @9 Q. k- Y! Z2 v3 q7 P, t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 C ^9 F7 a4 W% T: y* l Y) D
+ l! }5 {7 @9 L" M) i$ G# Q% ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 p5 y8 R# s' r1 P1 ?) Z
" v" E( o6 F; I9 j) lThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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