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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) f$ s7 A. C ?& o
- m& S; @! U! y9 H5 S9 w% uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " c4 h; }, u. r2 k5 J2 ^4 K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 ~8 r- i7 N4 A. I1 r+ E2 r l; p& J6 J" X* n8 V( W' C* g
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ ]# I$ c, \: `2 w: mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 u" V1 H: s' l1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! w4 D. y t& e& L3 s! ~3 m) w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ K$ o; U( s4 p( F x& {2 C. n2 T% C/ M
( w6 [9 `% [! V8 L% M ], JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) y6 ^8 ` o$ o1 E; H' i+ H
0 K1 W, N" I% Z$ B' j: FThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ V0 Y+ `3 Z& m
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