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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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$ B* I1 D# A" F% Y" sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' M; Z7 s: c. c, R" e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . n% J; K) b! v/ I( Q5 e, U, d* f
Let me just rewrite yours:
: I v$ ^( B! X. i2 S! ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# `( f0 R& T0 M; }4 ]: x
) M8 i- F [) r" V1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 u% r+ Y; j. U& O
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 T0 k/ K& r: ^% u: L: D/ ~
; a% \% X2 H% ^; I1 B( y3 S- {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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