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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 v m) v9 t( F9 P" Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ o0 S9 O3 M% Deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . A# m' p8 \& @+ w8 }% F+ \5 G/ U8 l: e: h' }+ x
Let me just rewrite yours:9 s5 ?7 P- W6 U3 ?# {* Y* c9 p
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' r6 A, G) i8 |8 ^, \2 m! J. a( X+ H
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 ~) t6 G, ]& a; I" {- a9 S% I! s8 B2 J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; O$ @3 D9 W" J e! }- gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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