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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ ?0 d4 n% u) G, d; J
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and j+ C1 r: _3 c, U6 O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 d$ p0 H b6 s6 U3 g* |4 t; \, t
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ W/ @. e4 P# H% y' |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 \; p& O. P" R i$ O/ Z8 M
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 t" {# k' C4 [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 p* W) s3 d6 Q3 B [! c- O
. x9 H S8 ]0 bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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1 o }% x- {% M. ]9 C/ ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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