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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ I! l6 j, t( i" [1 l+ }+ Dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ \# b9 i, i& J' _1 X3 A! severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 U6 q4 T! K% J! h( \ W! V# |1 d
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Let me just rewrite yours:
+ P' A- O# J9 ~) R+ t' _3 `' VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ e6 a' q3 T W- q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 V, L! m& e% G7 V: j1 J2 z- T2 g3 i
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( O g' Y1 L! p7 H! c
9 d6 D w* ^! u3 n! d1 PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 X9 M' R) p2 }! K5 c+ z( W
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