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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; {, `- U& Y! U& q* a" U2 KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me }0 U4 ?2 e" V7 U/ S4 M7 m
! q2 O% Z; G# m2 P: D0 r; b8 |1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! i. P2 k* O3 ?, z5 f
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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- @( j) m' [- Y4 V; |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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