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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ E) l, @2 p: R( N% a$ V: d
# L! F- X# I, @/ U* Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 \ L$ l- B. y6 x( f1 V4 E! Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 R; p6 L2 |/ S, [" d0 q7 [
. [. n$ V$ }4 a: E: Z3 NLet me just rewrite yours:
8 Y- z# G& O' P D, lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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3 S: z5 M5 b7 ~! P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 Q& }- _0 g9 k0 y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 x& w7 }0 M3 P) V
* [$ T' D! y5 n; I5 s8 B oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) B' h$ T/ D/ z1 F. c
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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