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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 T8 C) }$ q6 s) C" ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 ~' @! A Q0 c1 l& ^2 \4 u) N
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - N3 a; r' v$ N$ A$ p) D7 \
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" l s1 ]# t$ ~3 cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: o" Q, {4 g' N; u- s; D
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 z% o# A: e& K8 q" `7 \/ d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 @1 G' ^7 ~1 \3 L1 X* i+ r
) G* M2 v7 F) _ {5 r7 G- o7 f; JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ G. @) o% v: b; S
a( w# I9 n; q, }% N9 p( CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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