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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: k6 @- m* I; ?$ d5 x) N% A, X
" Y2 p% d2 \) G5 o" f* S5 _ n8 a3 o4 s4 vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / Y- V; w- F' i( M" O+ u: m7 `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 Z2 p7 |6 J( v6 r9 c) ?$ U" b {5 D
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Let me just rewrite yours:- P! ~0 m. `" s$ E7 `( o( C
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 b6 P& B: U- [9 `7 X/ |6 O
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 o2 f* ~; }! I1 F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- K* T3 r9 k, x( v' m& H3 I4 N
. I1 Q1 h/ ?) W+ Z4 i. K! F( {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ P5 Y- a `+ T- H6 i: M* X( _
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