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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 E' H: |7 l. [9 c6 n( f. e2 |
2 B- m9 q- Y" P8 U( cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; w+ K3 C5 S- q; O( P4 zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 C) N4 [7 Y9 l
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Let me just rewrite yours:7 e; b! i4 X: |: m- q3 P4 \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ M5 W+ R+ L! D6 Y" V# W1 q( M7 L
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: j5 q% i. F% v- D+ v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ F* Y) H' N4 g6 q* ]& y' t5 n
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 E9 O! a- J p4 K1 J
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