- 帖子
- 1691
- 精華
- 1
- 威望
- 245
- 魅力
- 0
- 讚好
- 0
- 性別
- 男
|
13#
發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
| 顯示全部帖子
Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) c, l+ E9 d' V( I0 O! r9 K
0 W4 b: f* V3 X* a2 U6 t! ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( e2 w0 B2 n4 @+ r' weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , @' f6 } b& ^$ p
" \0 }& |6 a, h
Let me just rewrite yours:
4 L1 _& L; S5 `# ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
2 O1 Q) P5 O& z( j4 R4 }- s% t* @
3 _& c& I# T7 r; C1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* n" f& q& u; w% |% O4 q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- \' C" W; u$ [2 C
3 N, h0 I3 M7 A7 `$ b% oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
5 T' Z/ A: x2 k# `3 @' ]# k! \/ h* l
Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
; l' O/ t' e) l5 [, j5 k- j8 j4 I' a$ M6 g3 g+ D' d @& R
Gretz. |
|