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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 ~' k& b4 }9 v9 F& X( M
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / F/ s- R1 L S- F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # z+ L% z; j6 Z$ j' W1 d" r: e+ v0 G0 e6 |* ]6 C
Let me just rewrite yours:
" k* [; W$ x, P, }. `# [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 _) P% E* k; J; M' K; z& Y
; N# Q( j Y" q+ B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( ~" l8 z, @, P, d6 L0 }# Q; R+ H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- D0 d+ P! W4 M, S( R7 [: b; U! AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 k. J* T9 Z6 O( }- g% v3 bThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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