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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* ]1 @, S0 Z) z: J7 Peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 x7 O2 P8 C( _! y, b
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' R) J3 {- p; u& n0 z4 F+ @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) d5 {: N B; h) v
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; w3 A0 j: V0 c- a3 |1 @+ i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 @0 ?9 j, f/ v+ J
8 }, G( Q. U8 E9 k. Z& |3 r7 VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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