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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% P2 \* g) j6 O
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, C( Z5 ^. W$ F, b9 x$ M) l7 Z& qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 V) _! r& F0 ?: ~
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 O" D6 A; ]2 p! L& R5 NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 `. V8 n2 |2 H, j0 s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; n* E2 \& ?; hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 O- `! j" ]. [: F/ JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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