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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 C6 o; W9 Z. W" A8 } h. t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 S p) q4 c& T! F$ H" D6 f8 ?. W+ k8 C, o& U
Let me just rewrite yours:( |8 x+ z3 S. U! Y: r e
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 X& C, N- f, f5 d
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! j; v& d# j4 o5 ] G
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 L8 v' }2 _, U
3 P* ], {0 v( U6 NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 o1 O8 R# B- o6 [
& g4 Y$ X7 a1 g5 AThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; v5 V1 l: f4 n; N
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