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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, ? O+ P& J' F$ e s$ t; B# V% l
* p5 b+ J2 F' H q4 tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* _6 D7 ] r" E8 \. b+ k" @/ jeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & l' |; t4 v, A9 F& M% ]" h: r
( @5 [# H' ~5 y' X. f7 B" oLet me just rewrite yours:
; d8 g2 ?7 V" E/ h XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 v4 Y5 x- \6 B! C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% z, |& k' y \7 W+ \% g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 _" Y0 |& y" g1 M: S
1 b% b" X0 ~: h6 w, E, q0 ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., q9 R7 d' t2 Z2 s% Z; d
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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