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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 B& H; _! L& M$ ?7 c- q
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) S+ @' W1 z' p
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . F# N( l. z1 `) N) i7 _/ ^' _ x) c1 p" p5 T
Let me just rewrite yours:
- K0 c0 L5 H7 lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ f, j: c6 Z7 ~
4 G! E+ }3 Y5 F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 f6 x5 a' D$ ~8 Q) x8 ~3 P0 @$ V
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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