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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 r# v5 x7 @, b/ w' B8 t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / t0 X9 w4 k$ j% l: n* I
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! l7 G. C/ t) P9 P' ?! xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 K; w' R+ j/ `8 E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 @/ Y y3 c" l4 G3 ^% J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. x! G4 J$ w3 {8 s6 X
, B' I6 Q1 d. w7 ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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