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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' E1 d! A+ u& l, S4 M
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # n, z* R3 J. ~2 W7 Y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 c* a; _1 U5 [4 r7 G1 t
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 ]3 R% {& X# ?2 k1 Y0 E" UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. M3 y, P4 b! C H4 n7 m4 w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: r, a0 a7 Q% n
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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