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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 e# |8 L) W) B! v4 l1 d
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 F: l& ~& t5 @5 i4 j! y; Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 K- v1 T) X/ D1 M Y" o, [8 j
0 z: H/ Q0 V' {4 O5 ALet me just rewrite yours:% w+ e, k1 T( @6 ]" B4 g( r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% j4 V# o' M# K w( j( ^7 P+ e
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# P) P Y0 @4 p/ [1 I& A b j. ?2 ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 w" p/ B+ o8 R+ D. c* o
& l5 |: N; F( f$ `0 h5 u4 ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ u0 y8 y! h' R9 q
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