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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& L+ H6 c; \' v' j& ]5 n+ y$ ]9 H
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 E( G. }2 e5 e* f' Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 K: X' x6 N( ~* h; J
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) @* m B- k/ s$ j) ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 a/ S6 P- i% H8 y5 }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 N, E, O: q& \; ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 Z; D: |3 @% P# |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 s; |$ ^9 l+ l
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