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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" c0 m6 b r% a0 H+ U9 zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) ^2 P: p" K; O, k1 ]; x+ D# o5 i
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 z, C s/ z% z7 P. f$ B" v$ SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ U' t) O8 L# `. _3 O
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# {2 I" y* f2 H+ y6 B
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# ]/ e6 w3 p1 w3 u" J2 C
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 ~7 d M# `2 d+ v+ X' \* C; s' V9 g
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