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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 u. J. u0 U% `2 Y$ U) _5 Q3 X; N, s
, Q; u$ g* P, k) uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ r0 F( Z0 D% P/ B; eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 v+ A. p' E9 u! g( B) s \( G( E( V
Let me just rewrite yours:- l3 ^% i7 ~$ i% B* k% Z/ U
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( s7 k+ S; y7 `3 ]3 K9 r3 L
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 P/ }$ O6 x3 d' t! g& ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* B+ M* J% Y8 o9 J& m
+ H* A. P; T7 U: HThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 |( |+ W1 I/ D/ V2 A0 ]6 A4 J
. Z, ~& [# W1 s+ Q2 q KThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. U* l2 Q! l+ t. B! g; d0 v
4 V( ` Y1 x8 P# v1 b; S+ B& cGretz. |
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