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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & X7 m0 K- T2 z6 u' C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . z# E S& h1 X& x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 T" H1 k* F3 e1 T0 HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ i# H& r1 l' N, `5 M% }& X
3 ]6 Z/ F6 L$ J# K& r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% T, g! }2 j$ M6 _
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ r+ s9 ` F- R: P: {. h8 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 }3 ~8 m5 W. r3 i3 Y
6 x8 E# j; ~, fThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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