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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( j: p' H+ h3 i- G' Z8 l8 X
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + R) b1 x2 M3 {# S3 L) ~, M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . N! A& X- ~1 w6 J' u7 U- R$ C; N& I% D4 h+ l5 Q2 V8 R
Let me just rewrite yours:- N. P4 u, C; @
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' ^9 T/ N$ l5 S/ H0 ^, o5 s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. s$ L; I J0 `& V& Z7 d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) C8 _+ D- z/ TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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