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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 _) v. Z' f$ d: j* X" ~4 a( M& V
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 ^: G* Z( \6 P$ D, ^' e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 z# L* q) ?* G i, b( f! V" N4 ?$ D, ?2 P; D7 M
Let me just rewrite yours:
& r* t# Y% y P4 ^' D/ jIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" Y( e9 k) G9 l/ N2 q- R2 E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ Y0 ^$ G8 H; G" |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# }8 W, j+ t/ d9 h- f
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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. Z+ C B8 D% O0 `; MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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