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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! A( e) _! t1 t5 z- @( ^
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 p N" ~$ C; ~6 Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( h! X0 C% |! k! ?5 U. L6 O/ @$ F6 q: E: o- @/ x
Let me just rewrite yours:
( f) X. g' y8 ?6 V4 OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ F; D+ P4 N. i, v
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 J4 S* z3 E7 L1 Q0 H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& p2 a7 i, r3 s z. J4 D9 ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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