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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 Y: Z _% D! x: r
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! R" z* E% }7 teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + i7 @9 X0 ~# {: R) ?, V$ Q: N2 B
4 c) h/ o' y0 n7 O, }! B$ p% gLet me just rewrite yours:
: j+ t1 e9 y# E2 |( w8 H4 I: W* wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ V4 a+ F/ `+ g/ B7 X2 _# [7 S
1 ]2 G, i" d) ]' F, [+ u8 b# t- J8 W6 m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' p8 z! U7 C1 E" c$ ^" m
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. R [9 t. F' T9 j7 C3 @
* h0 t0 v6 F, T8 J/ t- B! VThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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