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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:" }# l. A% @9 Q0 R5 z$ @) f, T
4 Z& G# s9 k. }9 q+ [ M6 \6 [0 Uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / a1 Y: o- u- E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! J; T# h2 o4 T2 v& t. v. J/ ~
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) Z7 D( s4 ]7 X0 i* FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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) k7 J$ z5 |4 T! @7 G8 B. c& L0 y/ p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 ^2 T9 G3 R- h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 k8 D0 Q, f1 {5 N/ r5 t
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 o0 R0 L- ]5 o9 h) G
- u( r3 H( ^- R1 d- {& |0 ?4 w: _1 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. P/ o1 n# Z9 t% C% `6 j5 u
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