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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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n# r. \' ?3 Y* H& `- |it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 ]3 U3 S. J0 K. Z* h* z6 veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 u3 F3 b1 W+ r2 `* o/ c/ ?1 ]) n
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 Y. u$ z+ o. x9 k; e& u2 c, o/ r7 ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 e1 k7 @! v# F
0 e; k9 [1 U3 o4 g1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! p* e& ~$ z/ T" I+ W$ W2 I3 N8 A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 j6 [+ l! U) P$ I* K' s3 c& UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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