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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& i% v/ T# J" Z2 e8 r' @8 Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * B) K% Y7 Z5 B1 _) S8 e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' r* Z/ `/ T) ^0 m4 I! S
$ w. f( ?3 x/ X* H6 @3 uLet me just rewrite yours:
" c$ W, G# f; g* G/ t+ ?+ F. m. nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- x) b9 K) l" V6 o7 C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; [$ G% u) n! B7 Z. r+ x/ T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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9 D7 P: \8 r9 cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." H$ J* Z& B1 X5 w, I; j0 W
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- N- M% }( @3 C5 T
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