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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ U( x$ u+ V4 r' `9 ~
0 O5 l2 E3 q# g" ]7 G' W/ [+ Uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and s4 i& z* d2 q, x1 ~0 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : a8 Z7 t5 s1 {1 }' o5 R7 T& {
- ^# _# i' r& K8 p7 w- _. VLet me just rewrite yours:
# `( h$ N1 K; r! `- lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, U6 L: A* y" A: q( U
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 s" q. i7 l6 `' p$ ]. J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ o J6 f$ [$ Z7 t3 O& SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- m5 G7 a, B4 H4 F5 w
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