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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 F( f0 t5 k0 q7 A! b5 u1 O/ [
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 I$ _9 {- _7 B3 ~' L Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) S4 K: Q- r0 y# i+ t/ Y% |* Q; [. ?8 U2 @( @- b& J5 L: [& S
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ D8 ^/ @! S9 @) w& R" D! GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% g( o) A. X- Y0 I1 [6 [2 V
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ @/ ] I c# u
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 T' Q z- g6 W
V& r% L/ ~3 C9 p0 zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 r, r, h) B0 ^5 U3 X0 [. u
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