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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ a0 F! ^- [7 l3 W" zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; U/ x0 i! m5 b5 \# D# |2 M$ b$ q4 O7 t4 @8 Y/ L' I
Let me just rewrite yours:
. [- f5 W! p! ?1 BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ I S$ H, p% x3 l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 ~" [0 R6 w" c* B; N6 k+ ~$ Q2 aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 c/ R$ w6 \7 M2 \, i
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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