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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% V' y% @: k/ e2 o- K2 _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 ?: a9 m U: |% ?4 \everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( h- s. K# K, X/ _. L$ k& L( b0 X( K7 d# Q# E0 K4 I
Let me just rewrite yours:
B4 x2 u3 l9 | Q5 j5 LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 _7 y. v; I( ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 d0 R/ z4 ?. WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 {5 O# `% r9 x, k1 }+ e hThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 c. m% Z8 M1 ?" `9 C3 a( I: v$ ^
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