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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& h' N3 s; x! h' K- e {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - X$ z! W9 u3 {, \
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - J ? I1 K" d1 r& [# ?, k3 Y$ M8 c6 S- m9 M) f7 {
Let me just rewrite yours:
* r7 H1 J& r7 U: B& d3 jIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 O q$ J) e9 V2 p% |
& ]" E& o) V# P4 ]1 ]" h! r3 t( r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) m9 Z/ [% }3 H* _6 z# s a7 |& d/ _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ K2 N, U# E5 o+ NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% ~0 _1 b t& ?+ D$ |9 o0 JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 _9 t1 J1 X; s' `& ]( o7 [
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