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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: |4 S" E& u1 `1 \0 T; I
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! I4 Z, n; n( ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % f& z/ X7 z, X9 ], |/ B6 u
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Let me just rewrite yours:( ^8 j. J( F" I/ \% o3 N
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: |1 B) ]: Q9 b } R% p" F; |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ a( t+ q3 c# b3 T' h' f/ Q
# T3 V" i) @) x7 m: b( Z* K3 P& QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 M: I' p2 g* u" ~' \5 x3 m
8 @7 T/ {$ K% F4 eThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." P6 @% H/ S7 D5 [( i; z
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