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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 s, @% P4 l% e4 _ f6 n# c
9 m7 O2 Y( \1 M5 ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 U j6 ^; x; I4 F: x% t% heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 A4 p+ f9 J0 d- z. h! w2 @7 H, x& y+ e1 ?: B7 U0 s1 ?
Let me just rewrite yours:
7 q$ m* E/ w+ K: }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' [7 T# X# U4 w- C. G6 t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: K* Y( ^( i( q; v* P) O: T# J
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ I& k) y, u+ ]7 D6 X+ f
0 I& L; i2 v' q2 K8 |7 Z* C: JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; h& R$ `; N' U$ A I! e5 T* y X
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