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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 W1 M. w) J% ^# ?! j: N
$ k* N& I1 M+ r$ Lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" _" h; Q" {4 ^" u3 j# D. G& _/ Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ d' {6 h& i: b! C4 [
: g; P, {+ @! g! \1 b- U+ X* _( qLet me just rewrite yours:
4 H* o; D& \" a( t4 RIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. w& u# }7 V+ L3 B( [, D$ S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 f3 M% u U+ V2 x* E" x7 j9 A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 u1 V& j* t( Q% L9 S |8 v/ u
. c; ?' q" S' b0 h# D' p2 PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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